Film draft 2


feedback on draft 1 of film

My feedback for my first draft of my film, was that I had an excellent variation of shot types and angels, which I did not initially plan for, they were just spontaneous and creative when I was on set and in the zone. I also had feedback that one of my strengths was that my camera manoeuvring was professional and controlled. My improvements are to re- edit my ending to be more dramatic, and to add the missing audio.

The timings where I am going to add things are :

0.37: I will make the boo sound effect more louder and rounder, and then cut to silence to add to the drama.

0.56: I need to include the sound of her mum calling her.

1.41: I need to add a heartbeat sound effect or a pulsing effect, to add intensity on the 360 shot.

3.48: I need to brighten the footage as it is too dark and grainy.

And the I also need to reedit the ending to make it more dramatic and intense to match my genre which is a thriller.

production titles

I made a production title to appear at the beginning, adding a production company, adds to the overall film and once more adds a sense of professionalism to the final media product, as all films have a production title at the beginning to introduce the film, and I want dot make my product as accurate to an official product as possible.


I made a trailer to my film to include on my website, adding a trailer I feel just adds a sense of professionalism, and lets my audience know a little more about what the film will look like.


One of the main elements that is vital to making a successful thriller film is the typography, therefore I really would like to take my time over my second draft into making it into  a professional looking product, so I need to further my research into typography and take peoples comments into consideration, therefore I have found some fonts that I am going to evaluate and narrow down and chose for my next drafts.

These are the fonts that I have narrowed down for my top choices and these are my thoughts on all of them overall.

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I really like this font as it almost resembles something being contained and restrained which would then link to the mindset of my protagonist.

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I again like this one as you can really see the horror/thriller style through the typography, I also like how this one is slightly more feminine which would again link to my protagonist being a female.

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I like this typography as it is bold and large and would stand out in a poster, although I don’t gain the right feel from this typography from this example.


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I like this typography as an option as the size varies depending on the different letters, and the whole typography is in capitals so again would stand out, I also like how consise it is yet your eyes are still drawn to the text.

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as this for the final option I like it as it is in cursive and is quite old fashioned which i look, it also looks like someone has handwritten it which gives it an authentic feeling which again I like, however I don’t feel that this is the right typography for my specific film.


Overall I have decided to use ‘Nightmare’ as my typography, as it stands out and and represents the thriller genre and my overall film the best, I like the variation is size on the letters as well it adds a sense of unstability which represents the protagonists mindset within the film, the the font I think will look aesthetically pleasing throughout the different texts.